About comments

1) What has the comments others have posted on my blog taught me about my own writing?

The comments others have posted on my blog taught me how to write better. To be specific,

since other students posted comments about their thoughts on my writing, I could share

some ideas about my topic with them and it became a good opportunity to consider about it

more. Moreover, when I wrote about "Importance Of Attending University" for reasons and

example paragraph, Jung Sub and Sang Won gave me some advices. Jung Sub told me to

add visual elements to help readers to understand my opinion better, and Sang Won told

me it would be better if I add reference of expert opinion in my writing because it makes

my claim more credible.

All the comments I have received became lots of help when I wrote my final draft. Thank

you Jihye, Ho Chul, Ju Eun, Sang Won, and Jung Sub! :)

2) What have the comments I have posted on other blogs taught me about writing?

I have learned a lot of things through reading many other students' writings, and giving

them comments. Through posting comments on others' writings, I was able to acquire an

ability to find out grammatical mistakes in writings, and therefore I kept it in mind and tried

to not make such mistakes.

Class Presentation

This is my class review. I talked about citation and punctuation rules.

Importance Of Attending University

                       

Attending university helps people to have more guaranteed and successful lives. It is possible to say that going to university is a preparation stage for one's future life in society. There are two reasons that can prove these statements.

First of all, in universities, people are able to acquire specialized knowledge that is essential to them. As you know, there are many people who would like to get high-paying and stable jobs. These days, to get good jobs, people study hard to get university degrees even after having high school education. This means it has become many companies with high salaries require university degrees, and it is hard to get a job without the degrees. It is especially more important to take a good university degree in Korea because many employers in Korea tend to judge individual's ability by a university one has graduated, and they hire people who are with good university degrees. Therefore, most of the Korean people go to universities to gain high education and specialized knowledge. Moreover, according to OECD(Organization for Economic Cooperation and Development)'s index of education, it says that Korea held the first rank among OECD countries for a high rate of college graduates and ranked second for having a huge wage gap between a person with a high school diploma and a college graduate. This proves that many people in Korea go to universities.

Secondly, people can experience social life in advance through meeting a variety of people in universities. For instance, unlike high school, there are no divided classes in universities. Thanks to this system, people could easily get-acquainted with lots of various people by taking courses they would like to and make more personal connections. Meeting many kinds of people, they would get to learn how to socialize and cooperate with others.

 

To conclude, we can live without attending university, but if we go to universities and acquire university degrees, it will lead us to a better life by getting a higher status and greater wealth.

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