2015년 10월 10일 토요일

Blog Post #3



Importance Of Attending University


Attending university helps people to have more guaranteed and successful lives. It is possible to say that going to university is a preparation stage for one's future life in society. There are two reasons that can prove these statements.

First of all, in universities, people are able to acquire specialized knowledge that is essential to them. As you know, there are many people who would like to get high-paying and stable jobs. These days, to get good jobs, people study hard to get university degrees even after having high school education. This means it has become many companies with high salaries require university degrees, and it is hard to get a job without the degrees. It is especially more important to take a good university degree in Korea because many employers in Korea tend to judge individual's ability by a university one has graduated, and they hire people who are with good university degrees. Therefore, most of the Korean people go to universities to gain high education and specialized knowledge. Moreover, according to OECD(Organization for Economic Cooperation and Development)'s index of education, it says that Korea held the first rank among OECD countries for a high rate of college graduates and ranked second for having a huge wage gap between a person with a high school diploma and a college graduate. This proves that many people in Korea go to universities.

Secondly, people can experience social life in advance through meeting a variety of people in universities. For instance, unlike high school, there are no divided classes in universities. Thanks to this system, people could easily get-acquainted with lots of various people by taking courses they would like to and make more personal connections. Meeting many kinds of people, they would get to learn how to socialize and cooperate with others.
 
To conclude, we can live without attending university, but if we go to universities and acquire university degrees, it will lead us to a better life by getting a higher status and greater wealth.


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대학 진학률은 세계 최고, 고용률은 OECD 평균 미달  (2014 OECD 교육지표' 44개국 조사결과 발표) Retrieved from http://news.unn.net/news/articleView.html?idxno=138829 on October 17, 2015


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댓글 2개:

  1. Hello Do-yeon,

    As soon as I read your topic sentence, I agree with your idea. Attending good university is a very important factor in Korea society. This factor has a significant effect on the process of getting a job. In this paragraph, I found the information to be added. I think this paragraph seems to be better when you add visual element because pictures about your evidences help readers with understanding your claim.

    Have a nice day,
    Jeongseob

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  2. Dear Do-yeon,

    I was good for reading your post. Your paragraph helps us to see conveniently. It's great. But I just hope that you to attach reference of expert opinion. Probably, that makes your opinion more credibly. The other thing is that we can live not attending university in your concluding sentence. How about 'without' instead of 'not' ? It's cooler. Again, thanks to giving chance to read your post.
    Best wishes,
    Sangwon

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